Thursday, February 16, 2012

Great Job Kate on Dystopic Traits!

Notice how every comment has a purpose: clarifying and deepening her response to the prompt. Lights out work, Kate from period 1.

Thursday, January 26, 2012

Nicely Done, 2nd Period Ninja

Lots of things to like in the below introduction and its 3 parts (hook, pivot, thesis). The anecdotal lead to the below introduction is just lights out good. It includes the essence of good story element (character, plot, mood, setting, rise/fall, theme, etc.). The hook transitions to the thesis while establishing the position of the writer. The thesis is much more than a topic. Nicely done, Luke, period 2, Mr. Mauel, 2012!

Hooks! Different Ways to Lead into an Expositional Essay