Notice how every comment has a purpose: clarifying and deepening her response to the prompt. Lights out work, Kate from period 1.
Thursday, January 26, 2012
Lots of things to like in the below introduction and its 3 parts (hook, pivot, thesis). The anecdotal lead to the below introduction is just lights out good. It includes the essence of good story element (character, plot, mood, setting, rise/fall, theme, etc.). The hook transitions to the thesis while establishing the position of the writer. The thesis is much more than a topic. Nicely done, Luke, period 2, Mr. Mauel, 2012!