Compare Contrast - Poems and Literature

Here are a couple of examples of good work on compare/contrast constructed responses. Note the use of comparative language to help compare pieces of text (in this case a poem with prose). Nice job Aili and Jackie :)

Foreshadowing - Welcome to the Land of 5 out of 5

Ashley's response scored highly because she showed she understands foreshadowing is a 3rd person skill. "...This quote foreshadows [fill in the event]." C2 elaborates and further links the comment and quote to the prompt. The comments deepen the meaning of the quote and why it responds to the prompt. Note: Predicting and Inferring are first person statements. Foreshadowing is what text does when it contains clues about what may or may not happen in the future.

Best Times Bobber Project: What do I need?

Best Times Essay on the Web:

3 question intro/thesis

3 body paragraphs (1TS, 2 CDs, 4 CMs)

Sample Best Times Essay

One Text Draft: Best Times Bobber Project – Mr. Mauel

Intro: (Three questions, Pivot Sentence, Thesis Statement)
Ever had a frightening experience? Life threatening? One event that forever casts a tall thin shadow on the way you look at innocent things? Like a river? Sometimes life’s lessons come to you in strange forms and places.

Body paragraph 1 (TS, CD, CM, CM2, CD2, CM, CM2)We walked a half mile from my parents’ house to the river. We were four 8th grade boys. Spindly legged and goofy. I was the reception of their impulse to go swimming beneath the orange summer moon. They had snuck me out of my parent's house quietly. I wondered what the river would like. Would it be as black as the night sky over our heads? We stood on the shore – five thirteen year olds at midnight. We got down to nothing but swim trunks. We looked out. Anxiety knotted my stomach. This stretch of the Spokane River’s surface was covered completely with large bundled logs. Under starlight, I saw that the logs were skinned. They completely covered the water like large white bones.

Body Paragraph 2
It was a game of chicken. Four boys seeing how brave we could be... how far we could swim under water before turning and swimming back. We dove into the blackness. The view under the logs took my breath away – breath I knew I could not afford to give up. Louvers of silver light slanted down between the logs over our heads. It illuminated and then sliced into sections the dark water. Fish looked strangely metallic. Sand at the bottom sparkled like something suddenly very valuable. I remember thinking the river water was warm, like oil. I swam to the bottom. I liked feeling how cool the river bottom was compared to the surface. I thought the feeling of sand along my stomach would make the seconds go by faster… help me calibrate how far I had traveled beneath the logs. I swam with my lips shut tight. I did not want to run out of air. Slanting sheets of light told me the logs were still bundled tight fifteen to twenty feet above my head.

Body Paragraph 3
I looked to my left and right. Where I had seen my best friends before, I could not see them now. It was not for pain that I was scared now. It was because I was alone in the black. I never missed them more than I did now. Had I swum too far? Did I have enough air to swim back? I had to make a decision in the darkness. Swim on or turn back. I did not need my throbbing lungs to inform me that I did not have time. I swam forward. Along the river’s bottom as far as I could. My muscles tightened up. I suddenly felt light. I honestly wondered, ‘Is this where I am going to die?’ The water darkened even more. I was passing out. I closed my eyes. For the first time in my life, I kicked my legs as hard as I could. My arms were locked straight in front of my face but I could not see them. Suddenly, I felt my arms collapse. They were now flailing uselessly in front of my head and now my side. I told myself, ‘I don’t want to die. Not like this.’ I forced my body to float up. My eyes shut, my arms hanging like broken branches by my side. I lost sense of space and time. Blacking out… Thunk. The back of my head hit a log. I thought, that’s it.

Body Paragraph 4 (Do I have to have four paragraphs? No. But I needed one to complete my thoughts).
Suddenly, a painful shock hit my lungs. I realized after five or ten seconds of the needles that I had made it to the other side. I could hear sounds from the other side of the river. My friends yelling and running over the logs. I opened my eyes. I will never forget the look of my best friends sprinting over slick white bones. The sounds of their falling down and getting back up. Starlit images and sounds… Knees knocking on hard wood... I was alive. I wished I did not have to be this-close-to-drowning to remind me how much our group of friends meant to each other.

Conclusion: (Thesis Restated, Topic Sentences Summarized, Memorable Statement)
That night taught me that life lessons – more often than not – can occur in the strangest places. For me, that place was twenty feet below a warm Spokane River at midnight… looking left and right… wondering what to do. Alone… For as many sensory images that filled that memory, there was one that resonated inside my heart. I did not want to lose people I cared about and, to this day, am glad I didn’t.

Amazing Booktalks- Grace and Ashley

Check out Grace and Ashley's booktalks (click on either the books or their names). There are so many of you doing amazing jobs on these. Here are just a few examples of how they did their work. Do you have to do yours like this? Of course not. You be you. You think the way you want. Just make sure you meet the book talk expectations (in your logbook notes and also downloadable from my swift site). Why should mom and dad care? Well, there are lots of WASL skills in there but more than that, it helps you get deeper meaning out of the text. Have good days, Mr. Mauel

Grace's booktalk

Ashley from mighty period 3's booktalk

I'm in the Land of 5 out of 5! Character Development

By Sara period 4

R: The best word to describe Bella the main character in my book is understanding as shown in the following two details.

Q: " I decided it didn't matter..."

S: (Twilight. pg, 184)

C1: Bella is trying to convince Edward he can tell her the truth on what he is. She is trying to explain that it doesn't matter if he is a vampire.

C2: This shows Bella is understanding because, she isn't going to judge him if he is a vampire.

R: The second quote to show Bella is understanding.

Q: "So am I, I told you is doesn't matter what you are."

S: (Twilight. pg, 190)

C1: Bella won't give up on telling Edward she doesn't care if hes a vampire.

C2: Bella wants Edward to know she understands if he is a vampire. She won't stop being friends with him because of it.

Main Conflict- student 5 out of 5

R:The main conflict in my reading today was man vs. man based on the following quotes.

Q: "I laid him out with a second punch in the very same eye." (Tennis Shoes Among The Nephites, p. 29)

C: Jim got in a fight with Greg because Greg was making fun of Jim for standing up for Garth, so Jim got angry at Greg and punched him.

C2: Jim's anger at Greg (man vs. man) comes from Greg's rudeness towards Garth and Jim's sense of right and wrong.

R: There was another man vs. man conflict in my story based on the following quotes.

Q: "If you even once slow us down, I'll take your flashlight and leave you in the dark. (Tennis Shoes Among The Nephites, p. 47)

C: Jim's sister found out about him exploring frost caves so she decided to come with. Jim didn't want her with him so he got angry at her because he thought that she'd slow them down, but she knew she wouldn't.

C2: Jim's anger at Jenny (Man vs. Man) comes from his lack of trust towards Jenny and Jenny's presence.

By: Christina